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The Oneironaut

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This is my first commission piece from a close friend/coworker. This is the largest drawing I've ever done and a new set size for future pieces. Took around 40 hours to complete. I'm very proud of it, so well worth the time spent. An oneironaut is a traveller of dreams. This is based off the phenomena of lucid dreaming as my friend is a constant lucid dreamer. I'm going to upload a better quality picture of this once I find a scanner.

14" x 17" ink on bristol
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2576x2164px 8.38 MB
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:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Impact

Hi TB8S,

First off, I really like this drawing. So much going on that there is always something new to discover or a new way of looking at it every time.

I get this sense that the drawings are essentially the lady's dreams. Which works well as she is the main focal point.

A couple suggestions:

4 items draw my focus (lady, earth, lighthouse, guy on phone). With the earth and lighthouse so close to the lady's face, it becomes distracting to me. I feel moving the lighthouse to line up just above her hands to the teapot would give a nice flow. Attention starting at her face, then towards her hands and the guy, then follow the lighthouse tower up, and noticing the earth and moving through again. Of course still enjoying the drawings other aspects.

Perhaps make the phrase "I began to float... up & away from my body" stand out more. To me it works a bit as a title/description and is actually what got me thinking that these are the lady's dreams. I'm lost as to how to do that without making it a distraction though.

I hope I have offered a little help. This is an amazing work of art <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt=":D" title=":D (Big Grin)"/>

-Michael