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Such good detailed work, the line work just continues throughout the entire piece.
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First off, I really like this drawing. So much going on that there is always something new to discover or a new way of looking at it every time.
I get this sense that the drawings are essentially the lady's dreams. Which works well as she is the main focal point.
A couple suggestions:
4 items draw my focus (lady, earth, lighthouse, guy on phone). With the earth and lighthouse so close to the lady's face, it becomes distracting to me. I feel moving the lighthouse to line up just above her hands to the teapot would give a nice flow. Attention starting at her face, then towards her hands and the guy, then follow the lighthouse tower up, and noticing the earth and moving through again. Of course still enjoying the drawings other aspects.
Perhaps make the phrase "I began to float... up & away from my body" stand out more. To me it works a bit as a title/description and is actually what got me thinking that these are the lady's dreams. I'm lost as to how to do that without making it a distraction though.
I hope I have offered a little help. This is an amazing work of art
-Michael
You clearly put a substantial amount of effort into this, and it paid off. The drawing is dynamic, intriguing, and has a lot of room for interpretation. "Why is she dreaming about this or that? What significance do the characters at the bottom right have? Etc."
This may just be a style-preference, but I do think the girl could use a little work. The shadowing on her face is a little odd and distracting. I have mixed feelings on her dress. In one respect, it creates contrast with the remainder of the drawing, pulling my attention to her. However, it also looks somehow incomplete when compared to the rest of your work. Again, had you decided to add more detail to her, you would have run the risk of her image fading into the rest of the artwork, so the approach is entirely up to you.
A few other things I noticed: the girl's hands seem unusually large, masculine, and flat when compared to the rest of her. The light house also loses some of its dimension toward the bottom, losing its appearance of roundness and becoming two-dimensional. This could be fixed by having curved the lines rather than having them linear.
These are just minor things I noticed after staring at it for a bit. I don't think they're anything to fret over, but this wouldn't be a valid critique if I didn't take the time to point them out. The only thing that I think really takes away from your drawing is the way it has been scanned in. The center is extremely bright and shows a little bit too much of your pen strokes, whereas the corners are dark and have lost quality. I would suggest shooting the drawing with a camera, being sure to turn the flash off. Make sure to get a photo that's not too dark or too light, then bring it into photoshop. By playing with some of the digital filters, I think you could get this drawing to really "pop out". In my opinion, this will make a dramatic difference for the quality and appearance of your drawing.
I hope that helped!
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